The Plague Of Meaning -- My Novel

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Description: Prologue and First Chapter . . .
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LanysNevelesser ::: Favorites Sometimes you could cut a few clauses out. Like "filling his perception," or "powerfully-built man." They're a little floppy, especially for a dream sequence. It might be good to be more immediate with the writing for that bit, if it's in a dream. The extra clauses and self-referential bit lack immediacy. Aside from that, I've read stuff like this. Considering what I'll read, that might not be an endorsement you want. But it's true. All the best. 07-05-05 04:05:01 _____________________________________________________
MetaBob ::: Favorites Yeah, I watched this when you posted it. So, by attaching this as a reply to my vid, are you saying you've finished it? Because as of two months ago you said it was "still being written." If so, congratulations, you can now call yourself a novelist without being a total poseur. And now everyone can ask, "Oh cool! Where can I get it?" 07-05-05 11:44:53 _____________________________________________________
TheAmazingAtheist ::: Favorites First of all, you misquoted the line. I wouldn't read a book containing the line you quoted either. Second of all, many books have prologues and even if they didn't, this one does. Third of all, do you even know what the word archaic means? Fourth of all, fuck you. 07-05-07 00:47:06 _____________________________________________________
TheAmazingAtheist ::: Favorites I agree. First draft. Just giving people a taste. 07-05-07 00:47:46 _____________________________________________________
TheAmazingAtheist ::: Favorites No. I haven't finished it. When I do, you'll be among the first to know. 07-05-07 00:48:29 _____________________________________________________
KriminySnicket ::: Favorites First of all, I'm not going to go back over that line to find exactly what it said, because it was painful in the first reading. But here, let's see..."colder than midnight on the third moon of Nessius Seven". Second of all, this prologue is standard and boring. And you're starting with a dream sequence. Which is the most horrible, cliche way to begin a novel. Go to any writing forum or ask. Search the blog of any agent. 07-05-08 19:48:05 _____________________________________________________
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KriminySnicket ::: Favorites Third of all, I know what archaic is. Do you? Since you seem to have no qualms putting stupid archaic wording to make yourself sound smart next to your futuristic terms. Fourth of all, have fun being unpublished. Don't expect to get out of that state with a good old combination of a pissy attitude and unwillingness to give up things like passive voice, which are frowned upon for a reason. 07-05-08 19:50:13 _____________________________________________________
Muaguana ::: Favorites I've finished a crime novel last November. I still haven't finished revising it/editing it. I haven't even sent it off to a publisher since, because it was 3 years in the making, I've found about half of it (written when I had even less experience than I do now) to be utter crap. I look forward to yours; you'll probably publish it before I publish mine. 07-05-20 02:51:58 _____________________________________________________
radpick ::: Favorites Good stuff. You're talented. 07-06-19 12:09:32 _____________________________________________________
PepsiGod ::: Favorites You're very creative. You're ideas are your own, and some shall admire them. Hear not what these talentless people have to say, for you know their knowledge of what is 'good writing' comes from MSN conversations, the internet, and mass failings of English class because they can't write proper sentences.(Let alone novels) 07-08-04 02:06:42 _____________________________________________________